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Because many children are not able to learn foreign languages, schools should not force them to learn foreign languages. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is argued that many kids do not have the ability to learn new
languages
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, educational institutions should not compel them to master foreign
languages
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.
This
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 essay totally disagrees with
this
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 statement because children don't know what their ability is, and not learning another
language
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 at a young
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 may exacerbate acquiring it when they get older. Most youngsters do not know what things they are good at. Pupils usually find new things "difficult things";
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 just the way they think.
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, it may seem that they are not capable of studying second
languages
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.
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, schools should teach them until they get older so that they know their competence.
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, in Japan, many students
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 believe they are unable to learn English, but continued English instruction from childhood through the end of school leads many of them to later discover that they are fluent in the
language
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. Some even become translators or work for international companies, demonstrating that continuing education can reveal skills they didn't know when they were young. Another reason why educational organisations should teach minors additional
languages
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 is the difficulty of learning them at an older
age
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. The majority of students do not realise the importance of learning a different
language
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 until it is too late. When they get older, it will be much harder to absorb a new
language
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 because their human mind is not as flexible as it was before.
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, a study published in Psychological Science in 2012 found that the ability to learn grammar declines significantly after the
age
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 of 17–18, because the brain in childhood and adolescence is more neuroplastic, making
language
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 learning faster and easier than in adulthood. In conclusion, students should be taught
languages
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, especially at a young
age
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, because they have yet to discover their abilities, and learning early makes it much easier than trying later in life.

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structure
Make the main idea strong and clear from the start and stay with it all through the essay.
task response
Try to show both sides a little, then give your view clearly to show you know the issue well.
grammar
Use short, easy words. Some hard words slow the read. Keep grammar simple.
coherence
Use linking words well, to show how ideas go from one to the next.
achievement
Clear view on the topic; you take a strong stand.
coherence
Good use of real examples to back points.
structure
Your essay has a clean form: intro, body, and conclusion.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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