Nowadays people are producing more and more rubbish. Why do you think this is happening? What can governments do to help reduce the amount of rubbish produced?

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Increasing
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number of waste is one of the common issues almost in every
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. Because of
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, there are many aspects that
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to producing
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amount of rubbish
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goverment
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government
actively seeking solutions in order to combat
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issue
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. There are many reasons why
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is happening.
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, in
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21st century, there is an increase
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micro- and
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micro businesses
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. From here, we can see almost every
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using single-used plastics to meet customer's demand and
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attitude seems
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timely
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.
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, the rate of population every year is increasing.
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, we are reaching to ageing population
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that exponentianally
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exponentianally
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exponentially
correlates with
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number of garbage being produced.
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, society must start aware of their attitudes towards
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the environment
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. In order to combat
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issue
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,
government
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the government
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has been
continously
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continuously
creating solutions.
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
generates social
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campaigns
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in terms of educational talks and cleaning campaigns. By implementing these, society will be more
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literate
liberated
to sustain
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a healthy
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environment.
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strengthen the fine
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against
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the rule of keeping
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clean. By doing
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, people will be more aware of their actions
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improving their way of living.
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,
government
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the government
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should reinforce these regulations and actions as soon as possible to put
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issue
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at ease. In conclusion, for
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issue
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to be settled
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, both parties should do their own parts. It is impossible to reach our goals if only one party do their
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. Bear in mind that waste will be always
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produced, only
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we
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can make the change.
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Try to provide more specific examples to support your points. For instance, mention specific industries contributing significantly to waste production or instances where governments have implemented successful waste reduction policies.
coherence cohesion
Ensure a clear logical flow between your ideas. Consider using more transitional words and phrases to connect your points more effectively.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, effectively framing the discussion on waste production and government's role.
task achievement
You have addressed both aspects of the task: why rubbish production is increasing and what governments can do to help reduce it.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
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  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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