It could be argued that technology makes our lives easier and simpler. But there are certainly people who feel life has become more complicated due to modern inventions. Which opinion do you agree with? In your essay, include supporting details.

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of electronic devices has greatly increased the accessibility and simplicity of numerous
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.
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be argued that a certain group of
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feel that certain aspects of life have been overcomplicated
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the rise of technological
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. In my opinion, I agree that
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certain life aspects are more accessible, in general,
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has made life more complex and cumbersome.
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is because the
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of
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assumes that everyone possesses an electronic device, which is a great assumption since not everyone may have the means to purchase one.
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, complex abstractions take time to learn, and especially for those unfamiliar,
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the older generation, it can be an arduous process to onboard
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. Not everyone can own an electronic device
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as a personal computer or a smartphone, which greatly limits the
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they can do in
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a
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driven environment, where payments are made electronically and registrations for appointments are made online.
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can be caused by a myriad of factors, but the most prominent
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obviously economic and social factors.
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,
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from low economic classes may not have the
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of owning smartphones,
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limiting them from paying at stores that don't accept cash as a payment option. It can
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be the case that certain age groups may not be exposed to
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devices,
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limiting their mobility and flexibility in travelling around. Other than that, these electronic devices come with dozens of applications which can be overwhelming and difficult to learn how to
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, possibly requiring external assistance for
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from older generations. Certain applications that are used for mobile banking and transportation can be difficult to set up, even for technologically savvy
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from the younger generation.
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barrier of entry can cause issues and add unnecessary complexity to what should be easily accessible
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as registration for doctor appointments, making reservations,
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from a restaurant, among other
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. In conclusion, I believe that more often than not,
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has a way of overcomplicating
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rather than simplifying them.
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is because there
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to entry to accessing the positive fruits of
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, which are technological ownership and understanding of its platforms.
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Clarify some points for better comprehension, particularly the challenges faced by older generations with technology.
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The topic is addressed thoroughly, showing a complete understanding of the task requirements.
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