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The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Different types of transportation should be recommended and global rules have to be introduced to control
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car
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ownership
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. It is indeed known that governments can encourage different forms of transport and international organizations can introduce laws to reduce
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ownership
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. I do agree with
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 because
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cars
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cities
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 have become congested resulting in traffic and they make
cities
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 noisy. But it is important to acknowledge that
people
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 should still have a choice to use their
car
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. Currently because of many
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 on the road, traffic issues in urban areas have become common. In most cases, congestion in an urban area leads to stress problems and anger issues in residents affecting their
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 health.
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 congestion
cities
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 become really noisy and most
people
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 arrive late at their destination. So, it is important for the city authority to introduce new alternatives for its
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 to reduce congestion and improve
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 health of
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creating bus and cycling lanes
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 of
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new metro and tram lines can help reduce traffic.
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, by referring to the issues above and acknowledging that
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cities
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 cause air pollution
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 of greenhouse gases
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 as carbon dioxide and methane, it would be better for international organizations to limit
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usage
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 and
ownership
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 to some extent, without taking away their full rights and giving suitable options. Limiting
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car
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usage
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ownership
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 could be done through creating public transportation opportunities and implementing ‘zero emission’ policies in urban areas around the world.
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, organizations should understand that
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 are needed in some cases,
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transportation
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 of goods. In conclusion, by understanding the negative impacts of
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 in
cities
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, authorities should take immediate action to solve them. Everyone would like to live in a city which values them by providing extensive transport opportunities and moving them away from
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 dependency.
Cities
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 designed for
people
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 should be an example and they should be
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 of every urban area around the world.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • reliance on
  • regulate
  • traffic congestion
  • pollution
  • public health
  • sustainable development
  • alternative forms of transport
  • car ownership
  • balancing benefits and drawbacks
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