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The chart below contains information provided by Australia's tertiary institutions about the percentage of male and female students who enrolled in different subjects in 1995.

The chart below contains information provided by Australia's tertiary institutions about the percentage of male and female students who enrolled in different subjects in 1995.
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The bar chart compares Australian men and women students' study fields in 8 different categories reported by universities in 1995.
Overall
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, the biggest difference between boys' and girls' fields of interest was seen in engineering.
Whereas
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, Business studies were almost equally chosen by both sexes.
On the other hand
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, Art and Humanities and Health subjects were selected more by ladies. In 1995, slightly less than 20% of male pupils registered for engineering which was 10 times as much as females by only 2%. Almost the same patterns could be seen in computing
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and mathematic
/sciences where a considerable difference of roughly 10% between men's and women's selections was noted . Business studies and accounting and economics were fields with mutual interest from both sides. approximately 10% and less than 15% of both genders respectively chose
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 path in 1995.
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,the number of women selecting
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education
 was almost double that of men, with 10% and 5%, respectively.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • tertiary institutions
  • enrolment
  • engineering
  • information technology
  • nursing
  • gender roles
  • societal expectations
  • suitability
  • caregiving roles
  • job market
  • business studies
  • gender distribution
  • gender inclusion policies
  • workplace diversity
  • gender stereotypes
  • historical trends
  • percentages
  • subjects
  • gender imbalance
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