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In many places, students must arrive very early in the morning to attend school. Some people believe that starting the school day early is the best approach to support learning, but others believe that starting the school day at a later time in the morning would be better for students. Which view do you agree with and why? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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There has been an ongoing debate about whether attending schools in the early morning for
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 approach is better than showing up late in the morning. Some argue that arriving late in the morning promotes enough sleeping hours,
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 others believe that attending early in the morning offers a clear
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 that will support learning. In my view,
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 attending late in the morning has benefits in terms of getting enough sleep, the advantages of
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, in countries with late morning attending
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, which
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, some argue that
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,
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their
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 will be clear for a longer period of study time.
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, when the first class started at 7:00 AM, they
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 most of the
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 tired. In conclusion,
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 it is true that showing up late in the morning can
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. outweigh these concerns.
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 I strongly agree that
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 have to arrive very early in the morning.
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task achievement
Make sure to clearly develop each point with specific and relevant examples to strengthen your argument.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph is well-connected with clear transitions to enhance the overall flow of the essay.
coherence cohesion
The essay presents a clear introduction that outlines the issue and states your position effectively.
coherence cohesion
A strong conclusion is provided to reinforce your opinions and summarize the key points.
task achievement
Both viewpoints are acknowledged and discussed, which demonstrates a balanced understanding of the topic.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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