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Band 3

Gdp of Russia Canada and India from 2000th to the 2020th years

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Introduction
The given graph illustrates
us
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the
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gdp
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GDP
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 information of three different countries
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such
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a
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Russia
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Canada
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 and
India
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.
Body paragraph 1
In 2000
Canada
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is
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was
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 in
top
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the top
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place
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 with more than 740
billions
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billion
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of
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dollars
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 meanwhile the second
place
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is belongs
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belongs
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 to
India
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 with
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gdp
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GDP
 of almost 470
billions
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billion
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of
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dollars
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. The
last
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place
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 is busied by
Russia
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 with
indicator
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an indicator
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 of 259 billion
dollars
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. Over the following
decade
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decade,
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 all of these three countries increased their
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gdp
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GDP
 and in 2008
Russia
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exceeds
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exceeded
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Canada
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 and
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india
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India
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 with 1.7
trillion
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while
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Canada
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 and
India
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 had 1.6 and 1.5
trillion
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of
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dollars
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Body paragraph 2
In 2013
India
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 got first
place
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 and
overcomed
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overcame
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Russia
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 and
Canada
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 with
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gdp
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GDP
 of 2.3
trillions
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trillion
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of
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dollars
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 meanwhile
Russia
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 and
Canada
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 started to
flactuating
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fluctuating
 until 2020. In 2020
India
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 ended up in first
place
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 with
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gdp
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GDP
 of 3.5
trillion
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while
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Russia
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 and
Canada
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 were
in
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2.1
trillion
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.
Conclusion
Overall
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 the highest point was at
India
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 with 3.5
trillion
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 and second
place
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 took
Canada
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 with 2.1
trillion
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 even though
Russia
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 ended as a third country at a point of 2
trillion
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.

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language
Improve sentence structure and grammar to enhance clarity. For example, "The last place is busied by Russia" can be rephrased for better clarity.
task
Add more specific examples or data points to support points made, particularly in the introduction and conclusion.
task
Ensure that all data mentioned accurately reflects the graph to avoid confusion.
structure
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, summarizing the trends over the period effectively.
content
Main points about the changes in GDP rankings are well-supported by specific data from the graph.
content
The essay successfully describes the general trends and fluctuations over the years for each country.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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