The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks. Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The flowchart provides key information about the carbonated
drinks making
process.
Add a hyphen
drinks-making
Overall
, it is clear from the graph that Linking Words
this
process is a multi-stage, Linking Words
as well as
it is a Linking Words
cloesd-loop
that involves 5 stages which are cleaning, heating and carbonation, mixing, filtering and filling , Correct your spelling
closed-loop
packaging
. first of Correct word choice
and packaging
all
they start with cleaning the Add a comma
all,
water
using raw Use synonyms
water
. The raw Use synonyms
water
goes through the filters after that it undergoes to Use synonyms
water
softener Use synonyms
then
the chemicals.
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According to
what is shown in went from the pump into the electric heaters , when they are heated they go through the cooling pipe . Linking Words
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this
we start to carbon dioxideAdd a comma
this,
it
, and Correct pronoun usage
apply
then
the carbonated Linking Words
water
goes to the mixing tank which focuses on the colour ,syrup and flavour of Use synonyms
this
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water
.
In terms of filtering and filling they make sure that the bottles and cans are filtered after that they start to fill them Use synonyms
then
put ut in boxes Linking Words
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subsequently
take them to the supermarket.Correct word choice
and subsequently
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