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The given line graph illustrates the travel to and form the UK from 1979 to 1999. The bar chart shows the most popular countries visited by the UK residents in the year 1999.

The given line graph illustrates the travel to and form the UK from 1979 to 1999. The bar chart shows the most popular countries visited by the UK residents in the year 1999.
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The line graph indicates visitors who go and return to England between 1979 and 1999 years. The bar chart demonstrates the most popular countries
where
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that
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people
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 of
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UK
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the UK
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 visited in 1999.
Overall
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, it can be seen that
,
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apply
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 the
number
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 of
people
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 who visited to and from
UK
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 have increased during the period.
Also
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, millions of English preferred France.
According to
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 the line graph, the
number
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 of visitors who travel
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UK
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the UK
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 and go abroad had similar indicators at the beginning of the period. Persons who visit abroad by
UK
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 resident
number
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 been maximum about 53
million
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 towards the end of the period.
Also
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, visits to the
UK
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 by overseas residents
increase
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increased
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18
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by 18
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million
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Correct quantifier usage
apply
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number
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 of
people
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 from 1979 to 1999 and was 28
million
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.
On the other hand
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, Turkey was the least
traveled
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travelled
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 destination for
UK
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 residents. about 2
million
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people
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 preferred
this
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 country. But France tops the list as the most visited country with 12
million
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 visitors

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, uk, number, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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