The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart provides key information about the mean of weekly expenditures by families in 1968 and 2018.
Overall
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, it is clear from the chart that the majority of
families
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families'
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spending is on food.
In addition
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, in 2018 people spent mainly on
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,
whereas
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in 1968 expenses of
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were limited.
According to
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what is shown, in 1968, 35% of
households
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household
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expenditure was on food,
while
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only 10% on housing.
Additionally
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, around 7% of their spending was on fuel and power,
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however
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tenth of their income was spent on clothing. People spent an
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on
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household and personal goods with a total of nearly 7%. In terms of 2018, more than a fifth of their expenditure was on leisure,
while
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less than 5% was on transport.
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, approximately 8% of
families
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income was spent on household goods,
whereas
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less than 5% was on personal items. In
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comparison
with the low
expeenditure
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expenditure
on housing in 1968, nearly
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a fifth
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of the weekly income was spent on housing.
Furthermore
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, fuel and clothing expenses were 5% and 4% respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas, while".
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • compare
  • spending patterns
  • allocated
  • weekly income
  • significant changes
  • essential items
  • food
  • housing
  • clothing
  • leisure
  • communication
  • increase
  • decrease
  • twofold rise
  • substantial increase
  • quadrupling
  • declined
  • food and drink
  • slight increase
  • prioritizing
  • necessities
  • transitioned
  • portio
  • non-essential items
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