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The graphs below show current rates of secondary and higher education among people in various parts of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show current rates of secondary and higher education among people in various parts of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given column charts illustrate the
rates
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 of secondary and higher
education
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 among
males
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 and
females
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 across four regions:
Europe
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, Sub-Saharan Africa (SSA),
Latin
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America
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, and East
Asia
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.
Overall
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,
Europe
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 has the highest percentage of individuals completing
both
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 secondary and higher
education
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,
while
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 SSA records the lowest
rates
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 for
both
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 levels. Notably, East
Asia
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 displays distinct patterns, with a smaller proportion of its population attaining higher
education
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 compared to secondary
education
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. In detail,
Europe
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 stands out as the region with the most educated population. Approximately 90% of
males
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 and 100% of
females
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 in
Europe
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 completed secondary
education
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.
However
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, the percentage of Europeans advancing to higher
education
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 is significantly lower, with 42% of men and 49% of women attaining tertiary qualifications. In stark contrast, SSA has the lowest levels of educational attainment. Only 10% of
males
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 and 20% of
females
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 completed secondary
education
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, and the
rates
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 for higher
education
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 are
similarly
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 low, at 22% for men and 19% for women. Turning to the remaining regions,
Latin
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America
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 and East
Asia
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 exhibit similar trends at the secondary
education
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 level, with nearly half of the population in
both
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 regions completing
this
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 stage.
However
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, higher
education
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rates
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 in East
Asia
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 lag slightly behind those in
Latin
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America
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. In
Latin
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America
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, 29% of
males
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 and 19% of
females
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 achieved tertiary qualifications,
while
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 East
Asia
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 recorded slightly lower figures, at around 25% for
both
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 genders.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rates, education, males, females, europe, latin, america, asia, both with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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