The bar chart shows the percentage of young people in higher education in 2000, 2005 and in 2010.

The bar chart shows the percentage of young people in higher education in 2000, 2005 and in 2010.
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The bar chart illustrates the proportion of younger people who are in high education over the period of 10 years from 2000 to 2010. As a general trend,
country
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D displayed the highest percentages during all the time studied.
However
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,
country
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B is the lowest
country
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whith
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with
which
student
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students
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in
high
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higher
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education, which figures is just
bellow
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below
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40%.
Firstly
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, by 2000, the three
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country
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countries
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showed a significant discrepancy among them. Both
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country
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countries
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C and D depicted numbers above 50
percent
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per cent
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,
while
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the
others
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other
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two countries had from 35% to 40%. Afterwards, their numbers
increase
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moderately by around 7%, except for
country
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B, which decreased by 5%.
Secondly
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, from 2005 onwards, every single
country
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showed
steady
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a steady
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increase, whose figures ranging from 40% to 65%.
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, there was growth around 7% more
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to previous years. In 20210. Both
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country
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countries
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A and C reached their higher percentages during
the
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that
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time, increasing from around 45% in 2005 to 80% in 2010.
In addition
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,
country
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D not only showed a significant
an
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upward trend, but
also
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it did not experience any fluctuation over the period.
Finally
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, three out of four countries showed a significant rise in contras to B, whose proportions remained stable
of
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at
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38% throughout
during
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apply
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the period of 10 years.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words country with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 3 times.
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