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Developing tools like recombinant viral proteins and ELISA kits is crucial for fighting viral diseases. Do you agree or disagree?

In recent
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, the importance of developing biochemical tools like
proteins
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 and ELISA
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 significant for combating viral outbreaks. I fully agree with
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 idea, and
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 essay will explain the significance of creating advancement in medicine. First and foremost,
proteins
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 play a key role in
maintaing
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maintaining
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 health
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 an
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 of healthy composition
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 as minerals,
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and vitamins
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 which have a
defense
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 effect from
viruses
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 and bacteria. In addition,
proteins
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 could trigger a guard mechanism, if
viruses
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 penetrated into human
organism
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organisms
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.
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, research conducted by the Tennesi Scientistic
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 showed that additional usage of protein can improve
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76 per cent of
immune
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 system, and 60 out of 110 people chose protein-based medical services. Another important benefit is developing ELISA measurement, which is dedicated to curing dangerous immunopathology.
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,
ElISA
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ELISA
Elisa
 kits can save millions of lives, who
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 from a lack of
immune
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. To be more precise, it is worth noticing that
, National
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a national
 medical university named
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Asfendiarov presented an interesting survey among patients, who totally believe
ELISA’s
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in ELISA’s
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 treating power,
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, 50 per cent of patients with
a fatal diagnoses
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a fatal diagnosis
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 could be fully cured
from
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 viral
viruses
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such
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 as Covid-19 and common colds. In conclusion, nowadays, developing new types of medicine treatments like viral
proteins
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 and biotechnology ELISA’s importance in combating
viruses
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 is crucial. I believe that
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 could prioritize
to
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funding into creating new methods and new types of
treatments
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 strategies to prevent coming medical
crisis
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crises
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, and should focus on
a
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public healthcare by developing the strongest pills and antidots.

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task response
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear and distinct main point, which is fully developed with supporting details.
coherence and cohesion
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The introduction clearly states your position and what the essay will cover.
coherence and cohesion
The essay contains a strong conclusion that reiterates the importance of the topic.
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Specific examples, such as the study conducted by the Tennessee Scientific Center, effectively support your arguments.
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