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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.
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The table and pie chart illustrate the financial plan and expenses for
police
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 in one region of Britain from 2017 to 2018.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the amount of
budget
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 showed an increase throughout the period, and
majority
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the majority
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 of the source of funds comes from the national government.
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, a large percentage of the money was allocated to the salaries of
police
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 personnel. The British government released 175.5
million
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 euros in 2017 for the
police
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 and
this
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 increased to 177.8
million
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 euros in 2018.
In contrast
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, local taxes exhibited a significant contribution
for
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to
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police
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the police
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 force from 91.2
million
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euro
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euros
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 to 102.3
million
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euro
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euros
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 in 2018. Meanwhile,
other source
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another source
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 of
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police
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the police
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budget
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 came from grants with only 38
million
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euro
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euros
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. In terms of how the
budget
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spent
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is spent
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, 75% of the
budget
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 goes to the wages of the
police
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 staff and officers;
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however
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 it decreased in 2018 to 69%.
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, 14% of the
budget
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 in 2018
spent
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was spent
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in
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on
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while
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 the amount of money allocated for buildings and transportation remained unchanged throughout the period.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words police, budget, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • budget allocation
  • funding sources
  • government policies
  • economic conditions
  • community services
  • crime prevention
  • public safety
  • significant increase/decrease
  • distribution
  • assessment
  • reflection
  • allocation shifts
  • budget comparison
  • impact analysis
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