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The graph below gives information about the number of people who smoked cigarettes in the UK between 2011 and 2021. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Zhaina

The graph below gives information about the number of people who smoked cigarettes in the UK between 2011 and 2021. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Zhaina
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The bar
chart
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 below illustrates the
number
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 of individuals who smoked cigarettes in the United Kingdom
during
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 10 years.
Overall
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, the given bar
chart
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 illustrates the total
number
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 of
smoking
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tobacco smokers, especially men who had the highest
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 of smokers rather than women in
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 period. In 2011, men who smoked cigarettes were 4
million
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 with a higher
number
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 than women with 3.8
million
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. But, till 2013, the sum of men and the opposite gen of
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chart
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 decreased steadily, and
then
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this
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 statistic changed rapidly. So, in 2014 tobaccos were used by 2.6 much more than ladies with about nearly 1.5, but,
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 quantity changed to 3 lots for gentlemen and 1.1 for ladies in 2015.
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, misters smokers dropped to 2.1
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 in 2020, but, in the
end
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 it fell to 1.1
million
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with
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twofold.
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, madams went into free-fall approximately to 1.1
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 in 2020,
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, the final change was in 2021 with the lowest
number
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 in
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chart
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 (0.7
million
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).

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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, number, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "illustrates" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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