In the last century, urban development has focused on building tall building as opposed to wide flat ones. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages

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development
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wide flat architectures like those in European countries.
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, tall
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a competition on building them between
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countries
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to build
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skyscrapers
in their
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country
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essay will prove that there are advantages
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the disadvantages of architecting tall
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, countries nowadays trying to have the highest
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in the world, and
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the country.
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when a city has tall
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, the economic growth will rise
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in high
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helps preserve surrounding natural landscapes and agricultural areas that
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positively to
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environmental
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task achievement
Provide a more balanced view by addressing both advantages and disadvantages, supporting your position with specific examples.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central idea and the ideas flow logically from one to the next, enhancing overall coherence.
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You made a clear stance that the advantages of building tall structures outweigh the disadvantages.
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You mentioned how skyscrapers can contribute to economic growth and environmental conservation.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Urban development
  • High-rise buildings
  • Skyscrapers
  • Mixed-use developments
  • Vertical construction
  • Urban heat island effect
  • Structural integrity
  • Evacuation procedures
  • Economical land use
  • City skyline
  • Environmental conservation
  • Tourism boost
  • Social interactions
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