The maps bellow show changes experienced by the town of Lakeside at the beginning of the 21st century. Summarize the information by reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps bellow show changes experienced by the town of Lakeside at the beginning of the 21st century. Summarize the information by reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given maps describe the transformation of
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the
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t he
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the
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Lakeside
town
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from 2000 to 2009
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, the map became less residential and more modern with the disappearance of the old
town
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, replaced by offices and a university.
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, the lake is smaller and
became
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a pond. First of all, on the left side of the river, the
town
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had 2 residential areas on
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side. After that 9 years, the residential area in the north stayed unchanged
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the counterpart was replaced by a brand-new shopping centre. The art centre between 2 housing areas
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changed to the cinema. The derelict warehouse which is
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the top of the map was transformed into a car park. The old
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which is to the south of the car park was converted into offices and a university respectively to meet the education and employment
demand
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of the citizens. The school which is near the river has remained unchanged.
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, the lake which is in the top-right corner of the
town
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became smaller and turned into
the
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small pond.
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, on the right side of the river, the
town
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had a residential area which vanished
by
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the expansion
by
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of
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an industrial complex.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words town with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "unchanged" was used 2 times.
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