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The chart and table below give information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in australia. Sumerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparations where relevant

The chart and table below give information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in australia. Sumerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparations where relevant
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The chart and table illustrate data about
tourists
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 at a specific
an
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Australian holiday resort.
Overall
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, the majority of
tourists
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 were from Asia and Europe followed by the US,
while
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 the lowest were from other countries.
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, European
tourists
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 prefer staying in camping or caravans for long days as opposed to Asians who prefer short-staying lengths in hotels. On the one hand, what stands out from the graph is that the highest percentage of
tourists
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 nationality who booked
this
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 resort from Asia, which was at 37%. European
tourists
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 were almost as same as Asians which has 35% percent. The third visitors rate from the US which was just under fifth. There were
tourists
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 from other countries which has 18%. Moving to the table, it’s clear that there was variety for lengths of stay, which booking hotel most popular for Asian and American
tourists
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 which they prefer 5- and 4-star hotels respectively.
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 Europeans and
tourists
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 from other regions choose camping or caravan.
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, Europeans prefer to stay more than two weeks
as well as
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 American
tourists
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.
While
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 other nationalities have just under 10 days.
In addition
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, Sightseeing is the main activity for both Asian and American
tourists
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Contractions: Don't use contractions.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tourists with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
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