36.Differences between countries are becoming less evident. Nowadays, around the world, people can see the same films, fashion, brands, advertisements, and TV channels. To what extent do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
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differences
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peaceful
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opinion
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have
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people
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people's
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acceptance
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diversful
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diverse
happines
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happiness
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humans
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that make
make
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makes
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eastern
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in
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of
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fascinating
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similarity
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similarities
countries
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countries
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thus
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hatred
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the same
outwigh
the advantages of being different.Correct your spelling
outweigh
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic
IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.
Answer structure for the type of essay
- Introduction
- Body paragraph 1 – advantages
- Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
- Conclusion
Examples to start your body paragraph:
- The main advantage is...
- The disadvantage of this...
- The main benefit...
- Despite these advantages...
- One possible drawback...