36.Differences between countries are becoming less evident. Nowadays, around the world, people can see the same films, fashion, brands, advertisements, and TV channels. To what extent do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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There has been an ongoing debate about whether it is better to have similarities between
countries
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to be almost the same with no
differences
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in terms of movies, trends, brands, ads, and Television or not. Some argue that
differences
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promots
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promotes
promote
more brighter life,
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others believe that
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similarity
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offers a more
peacful
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peaceful
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and reduce hatred between
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. In my
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opinion
while
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differences
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has
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benefits in terms of more diversity in life, the advantages of
similarity
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,
such
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as,
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people
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people's
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acceptence
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acceptance
and minmizing hatred around the world far outweigh the benefit of diversity. Life
created
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to be
diversful
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diverse
that can promote more
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happiness
and cultural exchanges. As
human
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humans
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we like anything
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that make
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make
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us
suprised
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surprised
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, South
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eastern
countries
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have different ways
in
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filming, like Indian movie makers, which will be
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fascinating
.
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This
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differences
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can lead to more eager about them.
On the other hand
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,
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similarity
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similarities
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between
countries
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in terms of advertisements, movies, fashion, brands, and TV channels, have a great effect on accepting others from different
countries
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. Being with someone with almost the same inputs can provide a common ground and offer
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support to each one
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.
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, when your feet step into a country for the first time and your clothes
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like
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theirs
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and you have
same
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the same
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movies
which
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it
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will
effect
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affect
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your way
treating
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of treating
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people
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,
thus
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will make them accept you more, and in
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consequence,
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reduce the hatred between you. In conclusion,
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diversity fosters
happines
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happiness
and cultural exchange, I believe that
the
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people
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acceptance and reduce
hatered
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hatred
offered by
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are more significant,
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the benefits of being
same
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the same
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outwigh
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outweigh
the advantages of being different.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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