There seems to be an increasing number of serious crimes committed each year.While some think the best way is to use the death penalty as a deterrent, ,many believe that other meausres will be needed. Discuss both sides.

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inflation, an increasing number of people are choosing to
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not able to find any work.
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few individuals reckon that
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capital punishment is the best
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to decrease the ratio of crime, others opine that there are a plethora of other measures.
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sides are elaborated
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situation. The most prominent one is
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afraid
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, if there is a rule of
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punishment, they will
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thinking about their families, which can alleviate the hazardous
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such
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as murder, terrorism and so on.
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penalty is a good
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justice.
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, any
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murder and that person is very close to their family.
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, they will ask for justice as they
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penalty.
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unethical actions, if the government and folks
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concentrate on
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of issues, automatically,
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will be
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diminished
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, if the unlawful act is not serious
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the punishment will be imprisonment and
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programme will be the best option.
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and offer my position, it is evident that both
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views have their own importance.
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, I firmly support the former view because it is convenient for getting justice and
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will be
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penalty, indeed.

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