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The graph shows the number of visitors to four international museums between 1980 and 2015.

The graph shows the number of visitors to four international museums between 1980 and 2015.
The line chart provides key information about the
number
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 of
visitors
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 to the Louvre, Vatican Museums,
London
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Science
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Museum
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, and
Shenzhen
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Museum
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. The units are measured in Millions.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that the highest
number
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 of
visitors
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 went to the Louvre during the period,
whereas
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 the
London
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Science
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 Museums had the lowest figure of
visitors
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 throughout. Focusing on
London
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Science
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Museum
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 and
Shenzhen
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Museum
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, these had 40
million
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 and around 39
million
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visitors
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 in 1980. By 1985,
London
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Science
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Museum
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visitors
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 witnessed a modest decrease as
Shenzhen
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Museum
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 hovered, after which in 1990 the
number
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 of
visitors
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 to
this
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museum
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 was equal to nearly around 2.5
million
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visitors
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. Meanwhile, the
visitors
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'
number
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 to
Shenzhen
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Museum
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 eventually levelled out at around 4
million
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.
Moreover
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, the
London
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Science
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Museum
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 experienced a significant decrease to almost 2
million
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 in 2015. As for the Louvre and Vatican Museums, the former began at around 5
million
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 before growing to 8
million
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visitors
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, remaining at approximately 9
million
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.
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 the latter rose from 8
million
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 in 1980 to about 10
million
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 in 2015.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, visitors, london, science, museum, shenzhen, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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