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Computers are becoming an essential part of education. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages to it

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the importance
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 of
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 is growing very high for educational purposes.
This
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 as a part of education. When taking into consideration the
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 for literacy there are too many benefits. Among them, one positive impact
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 the students are aware of the technologies growing up.
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 of technologies discovered every day,
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and children
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 get to know about these from many sources of educational websites.
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,
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 use
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the internet
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 to get access to practical skills via YouTube channels.
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, Industries like
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 as they offer online practical skills. These are
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 of reasons why many approve
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 of computers for literacy.
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, there are disadvantages too. The first downside often experienced is getting exposed to several scams. To explain, internet devices are often surrounded
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 which often leads to
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money
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. Another repercussion
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 witnessed is in terms of students
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 addicted to adult
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. To substantiate with an example, it could be cited that a recent article stated
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 highly increased by youth below 18 years.
To conclude
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, it is accepted that
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 of technological gadgets for literacy is a subject that has both positive and negative sides to it. In the future, it is anticipated that
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 trend is likely to continue.

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language
Be cautious with grammatical and lexical accuracy, such as 'usage of computer for literacy' instead of 'usage of computers for literacy.'
language
Proofread for consistency in subject-verb agreement and pluralization (e.g. 'computer is' should be 'computers are').
coherence
Consider adding more varied connectors and transitions to enhance the flow of your arguments.
structure
The introduction clearly sets up the topic and outlines the intention to discuss both positive and negative aspects.
task response
Both sides of the argument are explored with relevant examples, such as the advantage of learning through Byjus and the disadvantage of exposure to online scams.
structure
The concluding paragraph neatly wraps up the arguments and suggests an ongoing relevance.

Your opinion

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