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Some people believe physical education classes should be mandatory for all school aged children. Some people argue children should use their spare time on academic purpose. Discuss both point of views and give an opinion

some people believe
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students
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parents
 are believe to physical study is so important in kids life
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every
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other students
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. his children study in
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academy
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kids
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brands
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introduction conclusion present
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complete response
Ensure you use complete sentences with clear ideas. Breaking down your argument into more manageable points with examples can help.
logical structure
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relevant specific examples
Try to include relevant, specific examples to support your argument, which will strengthen your points and make them more persuasive.
logical structure
Your essay attempts to contrast different viewpoints about physical education, which is the right approach for this task.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overall health
  • physical activity
  • mandatory
  • teamwork
  • social skills
  • academic performance
  • concentration
  • stress relief
  • career prospects
  • intellectual development
  • extracurricular activities
  • compulsory
  • flexibility
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