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the graph below shows a comparition of values A and B over five years

the graph below shows a comparition of values A and B over five years
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The graph compares the
group
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 A and
B
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’s values over the period of five years from 2019 to 2023. As a general
trend
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, both
groups
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 displayed a steady increase throughout the period studied.
However
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,
Group
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 A was always higher than that
group
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B
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 by around 10 points.
Firstly
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,
Group
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 A started with values
at
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of
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 50 in 2019,
while
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group
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Group
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B
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 showed a record
of
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apply
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numbers
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number
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 of 40
point
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points
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. These
groups
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 showed a significant
trend
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, reaching between 50
y
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and
 60 points. Over the next two years after 2019, both
groups
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 experienced
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a slightly
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slightly
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slight
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 decrease in their upward
trend
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.
Secondly
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, by 2022,
group
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B
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 registered a higher number of 55, despite
of
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apply
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the fact that
group
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 A showed two units more than
group
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B
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.
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, in 2023,
group
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 A reached its highest point at 75, followed by
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group
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Group
show examples
B
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 at 65 points. In conclusion, the two
groups
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 showed a significant increase from 2019 to 2023. Both saw a mild
fell
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fall
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 in their
trend
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 by 5 units
although
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words group, trend, groups, b with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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