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The table shows the number of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the results of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two period.

The table shows the number of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the results of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two period.
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The two charts illustrate how many visitors two times (before and after refurbishment) and the
results
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 of
surveys
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 of Ashdown
Museum
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 in five categories satisfied.
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, many
people
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 went to the
museum
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 after the
Museum
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 development and most of them were satisfied. The number of citizens who visited the Ashdown
Museum
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 increased from before renovations around 74,000
people
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 to 92,000 after the renovation. It showed the proportion of
results
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 the
surveys
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 have different
results
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 before and after the refurbishment.
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, the percentage of satisfied growth reached the highest from 10% before the facilities were redecorated to 40% after redecorated.
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, the proportion of visitors with
surveys
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 in dissatisfied decline from 40 per cent to 15 per cent.
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, the number of
people
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 with very satisfied
surveys
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 increased from 15% to 35% and the
results
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 of very dissatisfied decreased 5% from 10% to 5%. Meanwhile, the
results
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 of
people
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 without response significantly around 5% before and after the Ashdown
Museum
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 renovations.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words results, surveys, museum, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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