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The graph below gives information abouth the percentage of population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.

The graph below gives information abouth the percentage of population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.
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The presented line chart illustrates the percentage of
population
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the population
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 residing in
cities
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 in 4 Southeast Asian
countries
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 over the past 5 decades,
together with
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in
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 the coming 2 decades. The data comes from the Philippines, Malaysia, Thailand, and Indonesia respectively. All of these
countries
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 recorded
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a relatively low residency in
cities
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 in the 70s, ranging from around 15% to 30%. Data from all 4
countries
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 shows that there was a growing trend in the percentage of city living from
then
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 to now. Notably, Malaysia has recorded the most drastic growth among all
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 recorded, with roughly
40
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a 40
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% increment in population moving to
cities
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. Looking forward to the future, all of these
countries
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 recorded are expected to continue with
this
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 population migration trend from rural to
cities
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. The city-living growth trend
of
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in
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 Malaysia and Indonesia is expected to slow down slightly in the next 20 years.
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, the growth is anticipated to be more apparent
for
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in
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 Thailand and the Philippines.
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, urbanisation has been happening since the 70s and is expected to continue increasing in all 4
countries
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 until 2040
according to
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 the shown data.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cities, countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 3 times.
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