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The line graph shows male and female gym membership over a thirty-year period. The vertical axis represets the number of members in units of 1000. The horizontal axis represents the period from 1980 to 2010

The line graph shows male and female gym membership over a thirty-year period. The vertical axis represets the number of members in units of 1000. The horizontal axis represents the period from 1980 to 2010
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the provided line graph illustrates the figures of males and females signed up for gym membership over a period of 30 years.
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, It is evident that the predominant throne belonged to the gentlemen throughout the surveyed period, except between 1990 to 2000.
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, the completely opposite trend can be seen in the lady's group. Looking
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 into the details , when 200 men joined the gym in 1980, it wasn't until 2005 did the vertex was touched at 5000. The second highest limit was 4,000 in 1995 Over time, that number has declined sharply since 2010, to around 800. That shows that they are indifferent to health.
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, the proportion of females
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 there were 1,000 people at the beginning, reached nearly 1,900 towards the end. It peaked at approximately 2,800 women in 1995. The figure decreased five years later but remained at the same level in 2005.

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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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