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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart illustrates the results of a report about
people
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's
coffee
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 and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian
cities
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,
Sydney
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,
Melbourne
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,
Brisbane
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,
Adelaide
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 and
Hobart
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.
According to
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 the chart, we could see the
most
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highest
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percentage
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 of
people
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brought
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who brought
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 fresh
coffee
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 in
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last
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the last
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 4
weeks
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 is in
Sydney
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 and
Melbourne
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,
it
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apply
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respectively were about 44% and 43%. The
least
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lowest
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percentage
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 was 34% in
Brisbane
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 and
Adelaide
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. The
percentage
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 was about 37% in
Hobart
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. About
people
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 brought instant
coffee
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 in
last
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 4
weeks
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, the most
percentage
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 respectively were about 53% and 54%, it was
Hobart
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 and
Brisbane
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. There is little difference in the proportion of the three
cities
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,
Sydney
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Melbourne
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 and
Adelaide
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. The
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percentage
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percentages
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 respectively were 46%, 47%,
49
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and 49
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%.
The
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In the
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 survey about
people
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went
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who went
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cafe
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to cafe
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 for
coffee
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 or tea in least 4
weeks
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, we can see all the
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percentage
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percentages
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 of
Sydney
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,
Hobart
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,
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Melbourne
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and Melbourne
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 was over 60%,
it
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apply
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respectively
were
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apply
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61%, 62%,
63
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and 63
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%. The
percentage
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of
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apply
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was 56% in
Brisbane
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, and it was 48% in
Adelaide
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. In conclusion,
people
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 who visited cafes for tea or
coffee
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 made up the majority of respondents in all five
cities
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,
while
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 those who bought fresh
coffee
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 in the past 4
weeks
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 made up the smallest proportion of respondents in all five
cities
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 77%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, coffee, cities, sydney, melbourne, brisbane, adelaide, hobart, percentage, weeks with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 6 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey
  • coffee
  • tea
  • buying habits
  • drinking habits
  • Australian cities
  • consumption
  • respondents
  • regular
  • participants
  • levels
  • observed
  • popular
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