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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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 bar chart illustrates the results of a survey about
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people'
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people's
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coffee
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 and tea buying and drinks habits in five Australian cities.
Fistly
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First
, about
people
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 buying fresh
coffee
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 in
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last
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the last
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 4
weeks
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, the
percentage
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 was over 60% in Sydney, Melbourne,
Hobart
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and Hobart
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.
It
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They
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 respectively were 61%, 64% and 63%. The
percentage
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 was 54% in
Brusbane
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Brisbane
 and 49% in Adelaide.
Secondly
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, about residents buying instant
coffee
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 in
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last
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the last
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 4
weeks
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, the largest
percentage
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 was 54% in
Brisban
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Brisbane
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,
the
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and the
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sencone
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second
large
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largest
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percentage
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 was 53% in Brisbane. The
percentage
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 was
udner
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under
 50% in Adelaide, Melbourne,
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and Sydeny
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Sydeny
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Sydney
. it were respectively 50% ,48% ,46%.
Finally
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, about the
percentage
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 of
people
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 who went to a cafe for
coffee
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 or
tee
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tea
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 in
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last
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the last
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 4
weeks
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, it was 44%, 43% in Melbourne and Sydney. It was
uder
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under
 40% in
other
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the other
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 three cities, it was 37% in Hobart,
34
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and 34
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% in Adelaide and Brisbane. In conclusion,
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 the graph, we can see
people
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 were really into going to a cafe
of
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for
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coffee
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 or tea , meanwhile, they did not enjoy buying fresh
coffee
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 in
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last
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the last
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 4
weeks
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, coffee, weeks, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey
  • coffee
  • tea
  • buying habits
  • drinking habits
  • Australian cities
  • consumption
  • respondents
  • regular
  • participants
  • levels
  • observed
  • popular
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