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The chart below shows the changes in the percentage of households with cars in one European country between 1971 and 2001.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the changes in the percentage of households with cars in one European country between 1971 and 2001.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart demonstrates the 3 types of
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cars
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car
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posession
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possession
of
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in
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the household
a household
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household
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households
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 which are the
household
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 that had no
car
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, 1
car
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, and 2
cars
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 in
period
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the period
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 from 1971 to 2001 in a country in Europe.
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, having no vehicle was the most common in
houshold
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household
households
 for 20 years, from 1971 to 1991, the highest
number
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 was
skyrocket
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skyrocketed
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 in 1971 showed that almost 50
percenge
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per cent
percentage
 of
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the household
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household
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households
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 had no
car
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 ownership and the
number
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 started to decrease in
following
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the following
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 years.
In
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From
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 1971 to 1981, people
owned
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who owned
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 1
car
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 was more than 2
cars
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 and there was
high
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a high
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number
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of diffrerence
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diffrerence
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difference
differences
 in 1971 which was over
than
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apply
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10
percent
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per cent
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.
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While
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However
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, the
statistic
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statistics
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 changed in 1991 that having 2
cars
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 in
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household
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a household
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 was more popular than
1
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having 1
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car
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. The whole
number
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 had turned over in 2001,
household
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posessed
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possessed
 only 1 vehicle was the most , followed by having 2
cars
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 and no
car
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 possession.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cars, household, car, number with synonyms.
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