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In future all cars, busses and tracks will be driver-less. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driver-less vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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 the statement, I personally think that transitioning all types of
vehicles
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 to be driverless is more negative than remaining the traditional human-driver
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, in
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 I will give the support reasons.
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, no-driver
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 will be heavily
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 on programs and artificial intelligence that function how they
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 and navigate the route.
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, if there
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 some errors occur, the passengers will not be able to travel to
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 destinations as
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 prior objective.
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, the programs that control the system of the transportation might not be able to make unexpected decisions, since they have no
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,
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, if there is an accident happens on the road, how it will change their navigation or handle the delays and hectic
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the road.
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, the replacement of driverless
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 will impact the employment rate in
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 market ,
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economic productivity will not improve. In conclusion, I truly believe that having no drivers in
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 will be
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a disadvantage
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 in the aspects of technical errors, judgement issues, and labour
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Ensure to address both advantages and disadvantages in your essay, even if you personally lean towards one side. This helps in presenting a balanced discussion before concluding.
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Provide more detailed examples or evidence to support your claims for stronger arguments, such as specific situations or statistics related to driverless vehicles.
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Use varied sentence structures and vocabulary to improve clarity and engagement.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are present, providing a clear start and closure to the essay.
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Maintains a clear viewpoint throughout the essay, which is necessary for addressing the prompt effectively.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • autonomous vehicles
  • human error
  • sensors
  • algorithms
  • traffic congestion
  • mobility
  • emissions
  • automation
  • professional drivers
  • ethical dilemmas
  • artificial intelligence (AI)
  • dependability
  • vulnerability
  • hacking
  • liability
  • insurance models
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