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Some people think that politicians have the greatest influence on the world, while others think scientists make the greatest contribution to the world. Discuss both views!

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It is commonly believed that government authorities have the most impact on the general public,
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, there is a school of thought that the researchers are the ones responsible for
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opinions are quite arbitrary and are dependent on the perspective that somebody may have.
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, broadcasting platforms
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 seem to have an involvement.
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 with, it is easier to think of a scenario of a child whose parents are employed
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 the realm of healthcare or space exploration, it is handy for him/her to think that they are the best.
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, it is the kind of education and environment that makes folks decide if the strength of a public figure
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 STEM experts, in terms of setting an example to
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society.
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, the word 'nepotism' can be used interchangeably
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 reason to see certain trends
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 of both
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parties in a given environment.
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, despite the role of the people who
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 an individual, it might not
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 explain his/her thinking patterns but rather aspects
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 as mass media can be
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one of the deciding factors.
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, a movie called "PM Modi" was recently released on television,
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 that, there has been a substantial increase in
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positive reviews by the voters which ultimately
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 the young generation setting them as their ideals.
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, when the mission '
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' was marked successful, an increased trend of people talking about science was noted. In conclusion, the popularity of a personnel, be it somebody from
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 background or politics, depends upon the point of view of the observers.
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 social media and online platforms can
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 change the game of fame.

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relevant specific examples
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introduction conclusion present
The introduction clearly presents the topic and sets the stage for discussing both views, demonstrating a good understanding of task requirements.
complete response
You effectively addressed both views, providing a balanced discussion that aligns with the task requirements.
introduction conclusion present
The essay conclusion successfully sums up the main ideas and reiterates the central argument.
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