The graph below shows the availability of various sweeteners in the USA from 1966 to 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the availability of various sweeteners in the USA from 1966 to 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph below demonstrates the availability of different four
sweeteners
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in the USA
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from 1966 to 2012.
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corn
sweeteners
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increased gradually during those 46 years, refined cane and beet sugars decreased in that period. Unlikely, honey and edible syrups were shown with
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consistent lines. When it comes to the chart, Pounds per person of corn
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was about 20 in 1966.
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, it began to rise and arrived at approximately 60 Pounds per person in 2000.
Inspite
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of its increasing fluctuations the corn total data describe a small number from the beginning of 1966 to 2012. Dropping steadily reached about 60 dry -
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at the end
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of time. Looking at the chart, consumption of honey and edible syrups trends were the lowest than others. Both of them had shown moderately accelerating
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Refined cane and beet sugars decreased slowly from 1976
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to 1986
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, next following years almost, remained unchanged.
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, the amount of
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the USA supplied was around 130 in 1966
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started to increase and the biggest quantity was nearly 160 from 2000 and dropped slowly to 2011.
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