The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.

The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.
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The map illustrates the
town
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of Garlsdon, which has a
population
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of 65,000
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and shows two potential locations (S1 and S2) for a proposed supermarket. The locations are evaluated based on proximity to key areas,
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centres, and accessibility.
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, S1 is situated on the northwest outskirts of the
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, near the countryside and close to the main road leading to Hindon,
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S2 is centrally located within the
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centre
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. Each site has distinct advantages and drawbacks in terms of accessibility, target
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, and impact on nearby areas. S1, located 12 kilometres from Hindon (
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10,000), is directly connected via a main road, making it accessible to residents of Hindon
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Garlsdon’s suburban
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. Its position near the countryside ensures sufficient space for construction, but it may be less convenient for those living in the
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centre
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, as it is on the outskirts.
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, the lack of railway connections nearby might limit its accessibility for people from more distant towns like Bransdon and Cransdon.
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, S2 is centrally located within Garlsdon's
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, a no-traffic zone.
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makes it easily reachable for local residents and those using the railway, as Garlsdon is connected to Bransdon (16 km away,
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15,000) and Cransdon (25 km away,
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29,000) via train.
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, being in the
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centre
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might pose challenges for customers driving to the supermarket, given the no-traffic restrictions, and it could lead to congestion in the surrounding areas.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words town, population, centre with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Accessibility
  • Congestion
  • Economic benefits
  • Environmental impact
  • Foot traffic
  • Green space
  • Job creation
  • Local property values
  • Parking availability
  • Pollution
  • Proximity
  • Public transportation
  • Sustainability
  • Traffic patterns
  • Residential areas
  • Shopping convenience
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