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The diagram below shows how geothermal energy is used to produce electricity

The diagram below shows how geothermal energy is used to produce electricity
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The diagram illustrates the process of geothermal power
plant
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plants
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to
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apply
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used as
electricity
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.
Overall
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, there are five stages in the process beginning with
pupping
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putting
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 down
water
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 until
to
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apply
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ready used
electricity
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.
To begin
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 with, cold
water
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pumped
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is pumped
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 down from the trunk to underground. The cold
water
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 is transferred with the injection well around 4,5 km.
The
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Next
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next,
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cold
water
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 will
passed
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pass
be passed
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 the
geotheramal
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geothermal
 zone which
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is this
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this
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a
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 zone
from
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of
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 hot rocks. After that, the cold
water
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 passed the hot rocks. The result,
cold
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is cold
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water
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become
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becomes
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to
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apply
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hot
water
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it
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which
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meaning
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means
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 the production well
which
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in which
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 the hot
water
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 is pumped up with condenser machines.  Next step, the hot liquid will steamed into
generator
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the generator
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 turbine. In a generator turbine there are two stages are the
water
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 powered by steam and
powered
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the powered
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 by
turbine
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the turbine
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.
As a result
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, the hot
water
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 is produced
electricity
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 and the
electricity
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into
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is into
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 the power pole and ready to
used
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be used
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 as
a
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apply
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electricity
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 and used by citizens.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • geothermal energy
  • generate electricity
  • diagram
  • volcano
  • magma reservoirs
  • deep underground
  • heat
  • steam
  • geothermal plant
  • turbine
  • condensed
  • pumped back
  • underground reservoirs
  • transmitted
  • power grid
  • distribution
  • continuous
  • renewable
  • volcanic activity
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