In many countries around the world, life expectancy is increasing. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this situation and give your own opinion.

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number of nations, citizens expect to live more than
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centuries and
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improved in our world, living until
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80 or 90 is not seen as
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extraordinary situation.Many people can access to hospital easily and
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the medicines they need without any problem.
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, especially elder individuals in our society are living a comfortable
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because many solutions have been created for critical diseases.
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, even though people normally consider being old as suffering because of some negative things they face,
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many elder person lives a happy
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with their loved ones and experience unforgettable moments in their
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decades because they don't have any financial fear.
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population can strain public resources, particularly healthcare and pension systems. Governments may face challenges in providing adequate care and financial support for an increasing number of elderly citizens.
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, longer lifespans can exacerbate generational inequalities, with younger generations potentially shouldering higher tax burdens to support the
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population. On a personal level, individuals may experience prolonged periods of health decline, impacting their quality of
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in later years. In my opinion,
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expectancy is a positive indicator of progress, societies must address its challenges through proactive policies.
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, and encouraging intergenerational collaboration. By balancing these efforts, we can ensure that extended lifespans enhance both individual and collective well-being.
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Coherence and Cohesion
Improve the logical flow by clearly distinguishing between the advantages and disadvantages in separate paragraphs. Consider providing more detailed explanations and transitions for a smoother flow.
Task Achievement
Your ideas are clear, but some points need further development to be comprehensive. Use more specific examples to illustrate your points.
Coherence and Cohesion
The introduction is effective in setting the context for the topic with a clear statement.
Task Achievement
The conclusion clearly provides an opinion and suggests balanced actions to address the challenges.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • life expectancy
  • demographics
  • societal development
  • healthcare system
  • pension funds
  • multigenerational
  • workforce
  • economic sustainability
  • intergenerational inequality
  • longevity
  • proactive policy
  • geriatrics
  • senior citizens
  • ageing population
  • fertility rates
  • dependency ratio
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