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The bar charts below shows the number of visits to a community website in the first and second year of use. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons with relevant.

The bar charts below shows the number of visits to a community website in the first and second year of use. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons with relevant.
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The bar chart
depict
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 the information about the number of visits to a community website in the initial two years of use.
Overall
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, it can be observed that from September
till
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to
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 December and April to August is a positive trend in
number
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a number
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 of visits to a community website. Regarding
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month
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the month
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 of September, around 2400 people visited, which has doubled in October and November, with 5000 and 10,000
respectivily
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respectively
.
Whereas
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 for
second
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year
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 initial
month
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have
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has
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 around 3200 hundred people on
platform
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the platform
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. In October,
their
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is
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was
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stagnent
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stagnant
 growth but it
surge
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surged
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 to 17500 in November and December which is almost doubled
with
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in
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camparison
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comparison
 to
first
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the first
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year
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. For the
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month
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months
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 of
Feburary
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February
 and March, it is the lowest
figures
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 of the
year
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. From the
month
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 of April to July there is a
concistant
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consistent
constant
 increase
of
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in
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 traffic on
website
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the website
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 which is
multiple
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a multiple
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 of two for
second
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the second
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year
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 as
site
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the site
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become
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becomes
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 popular among
community
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the community
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.
However
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, in August,
trend
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the trend
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 is reversed where
first
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the first
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yearof
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year of
 traffic
is
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was
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 more than
second
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the second
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year
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words month, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuate
  • peak
  • decline
  • trend
  • notable
  • consistent
  • significant
  • contrast
  • stabilize
  • visits
  • community website
  • first year
  • second year
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