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Global warming is one of the biggest threats human face in the 21st century and sea levels are continuing to rise at alarming rates. What problems are associated with this and what are some possible solutions.

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It is argued that in
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 growing modern world of
technology
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 environment has faced the most hazardous issue of global warming of the current century and it
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due to
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this
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 issue that the sea levels are rapidly rising. The major concern that comes with global warming is
loss
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the loss
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 of glaciers and habitat for polar animals. One solution could be to opt for
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natural resources so as to overcome
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 of greenhouse gases and plantation of more trees.
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 with,
rising
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 temperature of the planet is the major
problem
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 associated with the said effect.
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 overexploitation of the resources the temperatures have risen globally which has a direct effect on
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flora
 and fauna that
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 in lower temperatures.
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, a recent study conducted by scientists revealed that the polar region is melting faster than the expected rate and
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 has led to loss of habitat for a number of penguins.
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,
this
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problem
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 can be dealt with
utmost
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 urgency
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by setting some ground rules for nations. One of the best solutions to overcome
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problem
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 is to find alternatives to
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fossil fuels, which
on
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burning produces a lot of greenhouse gases
such
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 as Carbon dioxide and methane. Nations should opt for solar energy and should plant more trees so that the effect of emissions can be reduced.
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 example, Nepal being the only
carbon negative
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carbon-negative
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 country is doing
a great work
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 by planting more trees than they use. In conclusion, the
problem
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 associated with global warming is
rise
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the rise
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 of global temperature and can be dealt with
choosing
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 solar power and reforestation.

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task achievement
To improve task achievement, ensure your essay fully addresses the prompt by providing comprehensive examples and clear development of ideas. Consider connecting the solutions with their specific impacting mechanisms on global warming.
coherence cohesion
For better coherence and cohesion, strengthen the connection between some paragraphs to make the flow of information smoother, and ensure each idea supports the next logically. This can be done by using more connecting phrases.
introduction conclusion present
The introduction clearly outlines the problems and solutions related to global warming, setting up the essay effectively.
relevant specific examples
Your examples, such as the mention of Nepal, provide a relevant and practical illustration that supports your solutions.
logical structure
The use of transitional phrases like 'To begin with' and 'On the other hand' shows a conscious effort to organize the essay clearly.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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