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The given graph shows the number of arrestes per year for using illegal drugs

The given graph shows the number of arrestes per year for using illegal drugs
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The line graph illustrates the data gathered of people per year using illegal
substance
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substances
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.
Overall
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,it can be seen clearly in the data that there are some fluctuations and the statistics of people being
arrestef
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arrested
 for consuming
unathorized
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unauthorized
 drugs dropped
noteably
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notably
noticeably
 by the end of the shown period. In 1991 the number of
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arrest
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arrests
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 using illegal
substance
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substances
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 stood at 10.
However
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, there is a gradual increase
of
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in
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arrest
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arrests
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 at 20 in 19914. 1995 to 1997 remained constant
in
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apply
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the
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apply
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arrest
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 rate of 60 per year.There
is
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was
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also
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 a sudden drop
at
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to
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 40 in 1999 and reached a high of 70 in 2000.
Following
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this
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this,
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 a significant drop and reached
at
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apply
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its lowest
pf
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of
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 15 in 2001.
In
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From
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 2002 to 2005 there is
also
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 a fluctuation in
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arrest
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the arrest
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 rate
leveling
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levelling
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pff
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off
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 at
this
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 rate for the remainder of the period.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words arrest with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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