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The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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This
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 map illustrates a plan for redeveloping the airport, and there are some differences between now and next
year
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.
According to
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 the map, we can see that there are only 8
gates
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 situated in the north part of Southwest Airport and after revamping
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 volume will increase to 18. Meanwhile, the walkway on the west part of
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 area will be
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 of a sky train in the middle. It gets a sense of easier for people when they find the
gates
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. With regard to departures and arrivals, there is only one door on each side of these areas,
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, next
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 there will be two doors on each part. About the location of security passport control, there is only a check-in on the left and a cafe on the right. Next
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, the cafe will move to the left bottom at the door, the bag drop will replace the check-in, and the check-in will be on the right. Meanwhile, there will
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 be some shops between
gates
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 and security passport control. About the area of passport control customs, there are not any things now, in the next
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, there will be a cafe,
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 ATM and a car hire near the wall.
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, it can be seen that more
gates
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 could be found after the redevelopment of Southwest Airport. It is
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 noticeable that there will be an increasing number of facilities and utilities in departures and arrivals to cater for travellers.

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task achievement
Ensure to provide a clear comparison between the current layout and the redeveloped layout. Highlighting the differences explicitly can enhance clarity.
coherence and cohesion
Improve sentence structure for better flow. For example, avoid phrases like 'there are only' and aim for more formal expressions.
coherence and cohesion
Consider varying your vocabulary to make your descriptions more vivid and engaging, which would help support your main points more effectively.
task achievement
The essay provides a general overview of the changes, capturing the essential features and making some comparisons.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • terminal
  • runway
  • refurbishment
  • redevelopment
  • amenities
  • car park
  • hangar
  • concourse
  • public transport hub
  • access roads
  • boarding gates
  • check-in desk
  • baggage claim
  • departure lounge
  • observation deck
  • duty-free shopping
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