(an essay) Many people believe that it is easier to lead a healthy lifestyle (in the countryside). Others believe that there are (health benefits to living in cities). Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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is very depends on several aspects. At
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what do we think of
healthy
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lifestyle
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, if we think that it is about being closer to
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nature
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breath
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a
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fresh air, eat natural products
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easier to lead a healthy
lifestyle
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in the countryside.
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hand
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if we think it is about being disciplined,
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a balanced diet, being surrounded by good people and
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a healthy relationships
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a healthy relationship
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that
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it is
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easier to have
healthy
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lifestyle
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in the living cities, since it is easier to find the food that applicable for your diet, use all the
infrastracture
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infrastructure

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such
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as gyms, parks, medicine etc.. So
in conclusion
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I would say that it is purely up to the person
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if he or she is willing to lead a healthy
lifestyle
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that it is equally same whether you live in
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country side
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countryside

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or in living cities.

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Try to structure your essay with distinct paragraphs for introduction, body arguments, and conclusion. This enhances readability and clarity.
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Clarify your points with specific examples or experiences, which can strengthen your argument and make it more persuasive.
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Your conclusion accurately summarizes your argument and is aligned with the points discussed in the essay.
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You have presented a balanced view of both perspectives, which is a good approach to the task.

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