Many major cities around the world have become too expensive for lower-income people to reside in. What problems does this cause, and how can they be solved? Zh M

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The cost of living in metropolitan areas is very high

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living in these cities

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support.

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cities with a majority of

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get expensive and

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of living is very high, and,

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this city

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become more expensive for lower-income

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, the number of homeless individuals residing in NYC’s shelter system has skyrocketed in the past year, rising 53% in 2024, so the total estimate reaches nearly 350,00 homeless

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issue can be solved.

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supporting programs, like the Government can give

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cheapest education fees,accommodation and housing for

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with low income, or there are a lot of organizations which can help and support homeless

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these types of

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month. In conclusion, there

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of lower-income citizens

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suffer from expensive prices and

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, and,

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can resolved with

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support with their life conditions.

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Introduction
Body paragraph 1 – Problems
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

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Relevant & specific examples

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243 words

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Many major cities around the world have become too expensive for lower-income people to reside in. What problems does this cause, and how can they be solved? Zh M

Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

In many countries people have to pay for medical care, but some think that it should be a free service provided by the government. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In recent year sport stars have become increasingly famous and wealthy. For some this is a benefit, raising the profile of sports, but for other it is a negative influence. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

do you think that ocean exploration is as important as space exploration

“Prevention is better than cure” Out of a country’s health budget, a large proportion should be diverted from treatment to spending on health education and prevention measures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

you have a complaint about the hotel you stayed at while attending a meeting that we booked by the organiser of a company. write a letter to the organiser of the meeting and include, details about the meeting, the problem you face and what should be done.