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The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Vite at least 150 words.

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Vite at least 150 words.
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The diagrams above illustrate differences in the design of a public library 20 years ago and present day. In terms of the first diagram, the library was divided into 7 various sections. The first one
were
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 tables and chairs in the middle and in front of the entrance.
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 followed by an adult fiction
books
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section
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 on the left, and the non-fiction was on the opposite side. Adjacent
right
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 to the entrance was the enquiry desk. The Children's
books
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section
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were
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 placed
on
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 the top
right
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corner
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.
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, there was a
section
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 filled with CDs, videos, and computer games
on
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 the top left
corner
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.
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,
on
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 the lower left
corner
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 was a
room
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 for reading
stuffs
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stuff
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such
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 as newspapers and magazines.
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, in the second diagram, the sections are
decreased
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divided
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 into 6 different areas. Following the entrance, what used to be a reading
room
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 is turned into a computer
room
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 on the left, and a cafe on the
right
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 replacing the enquiry desk. Adjacent to the computer
room
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 is the
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books
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section
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, a busy area for adult
fictionbooks
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fiction books
,
information
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 desk, and self-service machines are on the opposite.
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, on the top
right
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corner
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 is the Lecture
room
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, and the children's fiction
books
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section
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are
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 on the top left
corner
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companied
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with
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 sofas for
a storytelling events
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a storytelling event
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.
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, the structure of the diagrams remained the same. Followed by a little bit of adjustments and exchanges between sections.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words books, section, right, corner, room with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagrams" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • floor plan
  • public library
  • expansion
  • modernized
  • digital screens
  • technology facilities
  • computer stations
  • digital media room
  • redesign
  • reception desk
  • information kiosk
  • visitor experience
  • reference books
  • community hub
  • social interaction zone
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