The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
People
often Use synonyms
argued
that Wrong verb form
argue
science
should play Use synonyms
significant
role in Add an article
a significant
people
's lives. Use synonyms
This
essay totally agrees with Linking Words
this
statement because Linking Words
Use synonyms
science
innovation could make Replace the word
scientific
life
easier and avoid harmful Use synonyms
effect
Fix the agreement mistake
effects
to
Change preposition
on
humans
health.
Researchers have done Change the noun form
human
number
of experiments so far to make humankind live Change the article
a number
the number
with
a luxurious Change preposition
apply
life
. Use synonyms
Also
to make our planet Linking Words
healther
and Correct your spelling
healthier
healthy
suitble
for all creatures. Correct your spelling
suitable
For example
, scientists have invented cars, Linking Words
airplanes
, and boats so Change the spelling
aeroplanes
people
can travel easily and with no time Use synonyms
if
we Correct word choice
apply
compared
to the past men and women used to use animals Wrong verb form
compare
while
they Linking Words
traveled
. Change the spelling
travelled
However
, now Linking Words
life
is much easier thanks to Use synonyms
science
.
Developing the Use synonyms
science
sector came with benefits, especially in the health part. Researchers have discovered medications for different diseases Use synonyms
as a result
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people
can live a healthy Use synonyms
life
with their families. Use synonyms
For instance
, during the pandemic in Linking Words
2019
Add a comma
2019,
covid-19
Correct your spelling
COVID-19
cross
the world and every Wrong verb form
crossed
county
was suffering from Correct your spelling
country
this
virus which allowed scientists to work together to produce Linking Words
vaccien
.
In conclusion, Correct your spelling
vaccine
vaccines
science
should be a priority for humankind to improve their lives so they can live healthy lives and protect our planet.Use synonyms
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task achievement
Ensure a more thorough elaboration on the examples provided. For instance, when discussing the improvements in health or travel, explain them with more depth.
coherence cohesion
The essay could benefit from a more varied use of discourse markers to highlight contrasting or reinforcing ideas.
introduction conclusion present
The introduction clearly states the position of the essay, setting a strong foundation for your argument.
supported main points
The essay does a good job of supporting main ideas with relevant examples, such as advancements in travel and medicine.
Your opinion
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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.
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