The chart below shows the number of adults participating in different major sports in one area, in 1997 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of adults participating in different major sports in one area, in 1997 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart above illustrates how an area in 1997 and 2017
has
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their amount of
adolescent
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participating in various major
of
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sports.
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, the chart proves that the number of people participating in sports
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mostly increased over the years, except in
cricket
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and swimming. The lowest one is
cricket
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in 2017 at approximately 8
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thousands
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, and the highest one is held by tennis in 2018 at 55
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thousands
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. In terms of the year 1997, the lowest number of participants is detained by basketball at 9
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thousands
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, followed by
cricket
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at around 26
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thousands
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.
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,
interests
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to
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golf and football
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higher at 31
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thousands
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thousand
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, rugby at 32
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thousands
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thousand
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, swimming at 35
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thousands
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thousand
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, and
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tennis held a peak at 50
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thousands
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thousand
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.
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, in 2017, the lowest one is
cricket
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at 8
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thousands
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thousand
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, and continued by basketball at 22
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thousands
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thousand
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.
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on
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the third place is golf at 32
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thousands
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thousand
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,
then
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swimming held the same amount as in 1997 at 35
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thousands
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thousand
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.
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,
similarly
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at 48
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thousands
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thousand
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and 49
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thousands
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are football and rugby.
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, tennis held the highest number of all time at around 55
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thousands
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thousand
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.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words cricket, thousands with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • participation rate
  • increase/decrease in numbers
  • trend
  • decade
  • relatively stable
  • major sports
  • potential reasons
  • contributing factors
  • public interest
  • comparison
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