Copetitive sports have been argued to have positive effect on child education by some, will other oppose. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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are significant. They
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emotional benefits
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sports
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interact
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children
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spend a long time
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following
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digital screens.
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can contribute by
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preparing
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to achieve a great
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in
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both in their childhood
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grow up. They are an
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if the child is unable to organize his emotions or
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. The organizational structure
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collective
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can help to
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a safe
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environment in
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which learn important social skills.
Children
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must participate in
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that will
learn
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them how to find solutions to the problems which may
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them
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play
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. Sometimes, learning how
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feelings
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that they felt
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because
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team members.
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, teamwork helps
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children
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to gain
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such
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as winning a match, which earns
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significant experiences that
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with them throughout
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, that include how
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or follow others and
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negotiate
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organized and unregulated times for practice of play. Each of them
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development in a different way. Noting that building personal qualities
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benefits that
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children
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in their
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life
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.
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, sport offers a highly organized
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environment
that allows
children
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to predict what will happen next.
Exercis
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and game
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schedule
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provide
them an opportunity to exercise regularly. Negative childhood experiences may remain stuck in
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memory for
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, but research
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that exercise has positive effects on
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the mental
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heath
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health
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of
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, those who live
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in difficult
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circumstances in their
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houses
. In conclusion,
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competitive
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are important to growth the
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children
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of children
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. In my opinion
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competitve
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competitive
sports
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can enhance their skills in different fields.

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The essay emphasizes the importance of competitive sports in developing social and emotional skills in children.
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The conclusion effectively summarizes the main points, reiterating the positive effects of competitive sports.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Teamwork
  • Discipline
  • Focus
  • Concentration
  • Confidence
  • Self-esteem
  • Stress
  • Burnout
  • Psychological well-being
  • Balance
  • Time management
  • Life lessons
  • Adherence
  • Group work
  • Practice
  • Resilience
  • Cognitive development
  • Physical fitness
  • Gracefully
  • Competitive spirit
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