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The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart above illustrates the amount of world illiteracy rates by it is region and gender in the
last
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 year.
Overall
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, the chart shows that female has higher rates than men. The highest is held by South Asian
female
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females
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 at approximately 56 per
cent
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,
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 the lowest one goes to
male
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males
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 in developed countries at a little to zero per
cent
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To begin
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 with, the female trend shows a constant increase. The peak is reached by the Southern Asian female at 56 per
cent
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, followed by Arab States at 52 per
cent
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, and Sub-Saharan African at 48 per
cent
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. The three lowest are East Asia at 20 per
cent
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, Latin
American
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America
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 at 12 per
cent
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, and developed countries at 2 per
cent
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. On the other side, for men,
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Southern
Asian
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Asians
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 are
also
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 dominating at 35 per
cent
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, followed by Sub-Saharan
African
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Africans
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 at 31 per
cent
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.
Then
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, continued with Arab States at 29 per
cent
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, Latin American at 10 per
cent
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, and East Asia at 8 per
cent
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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