The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts provide information about the amount of household expenditure in
Japan
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and Malaysia during
a
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the
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period of 2010.
overall
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,
Japan
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was
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saw
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a significant rise
of
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in
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other goods and services around
of
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apply
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less than a third ,
whereas
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Malaysia
was
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saw
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a sharp increase
of
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in
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housing
a
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apply
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nearly
of
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apply
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more than a third
.
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Similarly
similarly
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, the two nations
were
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saw
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a steep decline
of
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in
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health care roughly
of
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apply
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one in twenty . In detail ,
Japan
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used the main of other goods and services a made up of 29% ,
in addition
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food used
secondly
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rise around a quarter of
household
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households
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. in
the
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apply
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fact ,
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japan
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japan's
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apply of housing and transport
were
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was
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a steady gradually of a fifth . in spite
of
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of this
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,
japan
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employed
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experienced
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a sudden plummet
of
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in
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health care
approximately
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by approximately
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6% . Afterwards, Malaysia
was using
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saw
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a significant rise in housing around more than a third ,
while
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applying
of
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apply
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food and other goods and services
therefore
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a fifth . And
then
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exploit transport
was
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had
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steady
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a steady
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fall of one in ten ,
whereas
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health care in term of dropping one in twenty .
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
Vocabulary: Replace the words japan with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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