The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts provide information about the amount of household expenditure in
Japan
and Malaysia during Use synonyms
a
period of 2010.
Correct article usage
the
overall
, Linking Words
Japan
Use synonyms
was
a significant rise Verb problem
saw
of
other goods and services around Change preposition
in
of
less than a third , Change preposition
apply
whereas
Malaysia Linking Words
was
a sharp increase Verb problem
saw
of
housing Change preposition
in
a
nearly Correct article usage
apply
of
more than a third Change preposition
apply
.
Correct your spelling
Similarly
similarly
, the two nations Linking Words
were
a steep decline Verb problem
saw
of
health care roughly Change preposition
in
of
one in twenty .
In detail , Change preposition
apply
Japan
used the main of other goods and services a made up of 29% , Use synonyms
in addition
food used Linking Words
secondly
rise around a quarter of Linking Words
household
. in Fix the agreement mistake
households
the
fact , Correct article usage
apply
Use synonyms
japan
apply of housing and transport Change noun form
japan's
were
a steady gradually of a fifth . in spite Change the verb form
was
of
, Correct pronoun usage
of this
japan
Use synonyms
employed
a sudden plummet Verb problem
experienced
of
health care Change preposition
in
approximately
6% .
Afterwards, MalaysiaChange preposition
by approximately
was using
a significant rise in housing around more than a third , Wrong verb form
saw
while
applying Linking Words
of
food and other goods and services Change preposition
apply
therefore
a fifth . And Linking Words
then
exploit transport Linking Words
was
Verb problem
had
steady
fall of one in ten , Correct article usage
a steady
whereas
health care in term of dropping one in twenty .Linking Words
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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