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The chart below shows the number of international applicants from four countries that a European university had from 2004 and 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of international applicants from four countries that a European university had from 2004 and 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the number of international students from
China
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, Japan,
America
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, and Russia who applied to a European university between 2004 and 2008.
Overall
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, nominees from
China
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 dominated the chart throughout the period, consistently registering the highest numbers. Meanwhile,
America
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 exhibited the most substantial growth, nearly with
China
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 by 2008. In 2004,
China
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 led with approximately 25,000 applicants, closely followed by
America
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 at around 20,000. Japan and Russia lagged far behind, recording just 5,000 and 3,000 applicants, respectively. Over the next few years, the number of Chinese candidates steadily increased, peaking at nearly 30,000 in 2008.
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, applications from
America
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 rose sharply to about 28,000, making it the second-highest contributor by the end of the period. In
Japan
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Japan,
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 numbers remained relatively stable at roughly 5,000 until 2006 before experiencing a slight decline to below 5,000 in 2008. Russia consistently accounted for the smallest share of students, starting at 3,000 in 2004 and growing modestly to about 5,000 by 2008.
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