You are moving to a new city and need a place to live. Write a letter to a real estate agent in the city. In your letter: explain why you are moving to the city describe the type of accommodation you are looking for mention your budget and any specific requirements you have. #city #place #estate #agent #type #accommodation #budget

#city #place #estate #agent #type #accommodation #budget #requirements

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Dear Sir or Madam, I hope

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letter finds you in the best of spirits and radiant health and I

hoe

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you are doing well in your life.I am writing

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letter to inform you that I am moving to Melbourne from Sydney on 22

Decmeber

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December

,2025. To commence with,as you know

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apply

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I am struggling to find my professional job as a chef.You will

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by knowing

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that,I got a well-paid job in

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Melbourne,

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,I need accommodation,one thing you should keep in your mind,

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the location of my

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accommodation

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,as it will

easy

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for me ,to go to job,

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,it

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saves my time,which

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can invest in my studies.

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,please keep in mind,

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need

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apartment

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that

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have in Sydney,should be spacious and have

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a seperate

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seperate

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separate

kitchen and washroom.It will be best for me

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if the rent of

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the apartment

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falls between 225 to 250 hundred dollars.

King

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Regards, Saqib khan.

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coherence cohesion

Consider adding more paragraphs to separate ideas clearly.

task achievement

Double-check your letter for minor spelling and punctuation errors.

task achievement

You have included a clear reason why you are moving and what you need, which meets the task requirements effectively.

coherence cohesion

The greeting and closing are appropriate and polite.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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5
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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

158 words

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