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The chart bellow gives information about the level of education of Bulgarian people who wanted to go and live in another country in 2002, 2006 and 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart bellow gives information about the level of education of Bulgarian people who wanted to go and live in another country in 2002, 2006 and 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The presented bar chart represents the percentage of Bulgarian citizens planning to pursue
education
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 and living abroad from 2002 to 2008 in three levels of
education
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. In the big picture, it is conspicuous that secondary
education
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 was the highest
proporportion
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proportion
 compared to others even though
this
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 had a slight decrease over the years. Turning to secondary
education
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 as the primary level chosen, in Bulgaria, 65% of individuals want to learn from other nations in the initial year,
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 decreasing a small fraction in the two following periods and staying at the lowest point (59) in 2008.
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, the rest of the categories, both higher and secondary
education
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level
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levels
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 remained the same in 2002 and 2006 at just below 20%.
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,
in
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at
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 the end of
observed
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the observed
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 periods, the number of people pursuing
the
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apply
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higher
education
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 overseas plummeted
around
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 50% from 20 to 9.
On the other hand
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, primary and lower
education
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 skyrocketed and reached a peak at 32 in 2008.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words education with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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